Sela Locke

Here's the new fad, popping up again and making my eyes ache shamefully. TELLTELLTELLTELLTELLTELLTELL. That is what seems to be everybody's problem these days. Stories lose everything that makes them ...

Definitely needs a proof-read. I know it's fun to make a story about something as enormous a the world ending. I get that, but even so, it's a huge cliche. ...

Okay! That was - interesting. I think you should keep going, and I love your vague descriptions. ;) They're pretty cool. And it seems you found your writing style. =D ...

C H A P T E R S E V E N “So… are there any other va- I mean, any more of Delys’ kind in these woods?” She knew ...

Love it, love it, LOVE IT! You are really, really improving. A LOT. I really can't believe how much better you are. The descriptions were better, and Alicia seemed realer ...

Before I do the over-view, I'm going to grab a few mistakes. ;) When Red reached her grandmothers’ she felt something was wrong. The door to the cottage was slightly ...

The funny thing is, well... I didn't that totally unconsciously. I'm just drawn to forests, dahhling. Ah well, SB is moving along nicely, and I believe I have plenty of ...

C H A P T E R S I X “That’s great, honey. I just - I don’t have time for…” The woman who strode into view stopped abruptly, staring ...

Don't worry, she isn't escaping this time. Bad for Aslina - good for you. And then Jason and Yel come back in... I guess it would be the next chapter... ...

They searched the trees that surrounded them, but there was no one to be found. For a moment, all was quiet, and the smell of alive, fresh things seemed to ...

The dream Aslina had as she floated through her light-headed unconsciousness was one she’d had many times before. It always seemed to end the same way, but for some reason, ...

C H A P T E R T H R E E For a few moments all Aslina did was lie still, the chirping of the crickets and the rustlings ...

C H A P T E R T W O “Lins, wake up! C’mon Lins, c’mon!” Tina’s anxious voice broke the darkness, and Aslina shot up, hurrying to reassure the ...

Ooh! So now you're using cliffies too? Cyril reminds me of Jim Carrey mixed up with Kayo. That's just me, though. Or maybe it's not a cliff-hanger, and Raymond is ...

Love it, love it, LOVE IT. Nothing I noticed that could be criticized - really, nothing. Des is so... like.... someone. Maybe a mix of me, Monica, and... Bub? No, ...